NOT QUITE TERRESTRIAL (DRAFT ONE) #1
BY NATE RAYMOND


PAGE 1, SPLASH PAGE

Sierra should be thrusting herself forward out of her bed, sweat dripping off of her forehead. She's just woken up from a nightmare, so make her look scared.

NARRATION (SIERRA)
Every night I dream the same dream and wake up the same way.

TITLE/CREDITS:
Genesis
Introducing Sierra Holt, the Alien-Girl
Written by Nate1234
Drawn by Katroz


PAGE 2, 6 PANELS

Panel 1
Side view of Sierra sitting-up in her bed, resting her head on her palm.

NARRATION
I dream about the day Mom was shot in a drive-by shooting as I watched helplessly through the window.

Panel 2
Sierra's hand is now resting on a photo of he mother sitting on a dresser next to her bed. Nothing except the photo and her hand should be seen.

NARRATION
I miss her so much.

Panel 3
This is where our mysterious caller scene begins. The phone is on the same dresser as the photo. There should also be a digital clock that reads 7:49.

SOUND EFFECTS
RING

SIERRA THOUGHT (NO BUBBLE)
?

Panel 4
Sierra now has the phone next to her ear and is sitting on the edge of her bed.

SIERRA
Hel--

PERSON ON PHONE
Sierra, a mad man is out to kill you! If anyone tries to hurt you, use your alien powers!

Panel 5
There should be a bit of change from last panel, but not much.

SIERRA
Who is this?

Panel 6
She now is hold the phone, but away from her face.

SIERRA
Great. He hung up.


PAGE 3, 5 PANELS

Panel 1
Skipping ahead (it now being about 8:20), Sierra is now sitting on a bench at the bus stop with her friend, Matt.

CAPTION
Later, at the bus stop...

NARRATION
The boy next to me is Matt Smith. I've been friends with him since kindergarten.
I've had a crush on him that long too.

Panel 2
Silent panel. Matt and Sierra are still sitting there.

Panel 3
Still sitting, but this time talking.

MATT
So, are you going to the dance tonight?

SIERRA
I don't know. No one's asked me.

MATT
You could go with me.

SIERRA
Okay.

MATT
Cool.

Panel 4
Silent panel. Matt and Sierra are still sitting there.

Panel 5
The bus arrives.


PAGE 4, SPLASH PAGE

This is the dance page I told you about. The only rules are the following:

Otherwise, go wild! If you want Chamber and Husk slow dancing, do it! If you want Impulse spiking the punch, go on ahead! If you want Katroz (out of costume, of course) or yourself  in there, be my guest! Just have fun with this page.


PAGE 5, 6 PANELS

Panel 1
Sierra and Matt are still dancing.

SIERRA
Hey, thanks for asking me out.

Panel 2

MATT
No prob. What're friends for?

Panel 3
Make Sierra look a little disappointed.

SIERRA THOUGHT
Yeah, only friends. God, I wish we were something more.

Panel 4

SIERRA THOUGHT
But not only do I not want to risk losing our friendship, but my dad won't even allow me to have a boyfriend.



Panel 5

SIERRA THOUGHT
Not that I haven't broken his rules before.
Still, I wish I could take a peek inside your mind.

Panel 6

SIERRA THOUGHT
Then I could see what you think of me.


PAGE 6, 4 PANELS

Panel 1
Sierra and Matt are now leaving the dance.

CAPTION
After the dance...

MATT
So, what'cha wanna do now?

Panel 2
Close up on Sierra. She's about to get the heck beat out of her from one of Shawn Collin's henchmen, so there should be a big hand covering up her mouth and her eyes should be popped wide open.

SIERRA
I don't know. We could always get some piz--

HENCHMAN
Shut up kid or I'll beat the $#!% out of you!

Panel 3

MATT
Let her go!

Panel 4
Still with his hand over Sierra's mouth, the henchman uppercuts Matt in the jaw.

SOUND EFFECTS
WAK


PAGE 7, 8 PANELS

Panel 1
Sierra wacks the badguy in the family jewels with her foot, making him let go of her.

SOUND EFFECTS
WAM

Panel 2
Sierra begins to run for help, but the badguy dives and grabs her.

SIERRA
I... I gotta get help!

HENCHMAN
Oh no you don't!

Panel 3
Sierra's on the ground, with the badguy on top of her, punching her in the face.

HENCHMAN
I don't care what the boss said! After the $#!% you just pulled, I'm going to beat the Hell out of you!

Panels 4-6
The badguy is beating Sierra up for these three panels.

Panel 7
No more beating. Close up on Sierra's face, which should be a bit bloody.

SIERRA
THAT...

PANEL 8
Same as Panel 7, but don't draw anything in her eyes (like pupils) because her powers are about to kick in.

SIERRA
DOES...


PAGE 8, SPLASH PAGE

Sierra is floating in the air, her arms flung back. A powerful telepathic blast knocks the badguy over, leaving his mind empty. There should still be nothing in Sierra's eyes to show how powerful and mad she is.

SIERRA
IT!


PAGE 9, 4 PANELS

Panel 1
Matt and Sierra are now standing over the badguy's lifeless body. Tears should be running down Sierra's cheeks.

MATT
Oh my God! What'd you do to him?

SIERRA
I... I don't know! Matt... I'm scared!

Panel 2
Matt is now hugging her.

MATT
It's okay. Besides, he deserved it.

Panel 3
Holding him away from her.

SIERRA
Jesus Christ, that phone call wasn’t a prank?

MATT
What?

SIERRA
Some guy called me this morning and said that if anyone tried to kill me I should use my alien powers.
I thought it was a joke, but now I'm not so sure.

Panel 4

MATT
Maybe you should become a superhero, eh?

SIERRA
Cool idea!

MATT
You do realize I was only kidding, right?


PAGE 10, 9 PANELS

Panel 1
Sierra and Matt are now back in Sierra's room. This entire page is dedicated to Alien-Girl's costume. Sierra's holding a piece of paper in front of them with the costume design (don't show the design, though).

CAPTION
Later, in Sierra's room...

SIERRA
Every good hero two things: a costume and a name. Here's what I've come up with:

Panel 2
Spread across her bed is a big, black cape.

NARRATION
All heroes wear capes. Luckily, I just so happen to have one from an old Halloween costume.

Panel 3
A pair of baseball cleats are sitting on the floor.

NARRATION
For traction, I think I'll wear my old baseball cleats.

Panel 4
Sierra's hands are pulling a skirt out of a dresser drawer.

NARRATION
I’ll wear a skirt so the bad-guys know they’re getting their butts kicked by a girl.

Panel 5
Sierra grabs her no-sleeve shirt off of a shirt hanger in her closet.

NARRATION
My arms should be able to move with ease.

Panel 6
Sierra pulls a glove on over her hand.

NARRATION
I need gloves to hide my fingerprints.

Panel 7
On her bed now lays her belt with the belt bag and a bunch of stuff like a pocket knife, a magnifying glass, a pencil, and a notepad.

NARRATION
I'll also need something to hold all of my valuable fighting junk.

Panel 8
Sierra is holding a piece of material that she's cutting two holes in (it'll be her mask).

NARRATION
And, of course, I'll need a mask.

Panel 9
Matt is leaning against the bathroom door, waiting for Sierra to finish getting her costume on.

MATT
Do you have it on yet?

SIERRA
Almost.


PAGE 11, SPLASH PAGE

Big shot of Sierra in her costume. This is our her shot so make it spectacular. Matt should be behind her, staring in amazement. Oh, and try to keep the word bubbles off of Sierra. That way we could later crop Sierra off of the page and display it on the webpage.

SIERRA
Oh, and as for a name, how about we call me...
ALIEN GIRL!


PAGE 12, 3 PANELS

Panel 1
Back outside the school (where Sierra was attacked), we see Collins holding a leash which is attached to S-409 (the cat-girl you created). He's using her to find his henchman, who is lying dead on the ground.

CAPTION
Back outside the school...

S-409
I think I've found him, sir.

Panel 2

SHAWN
Such a shame. Do you know what this means?

Panel 3

SHAWN
It means we'll be meeting up with Sierra Holt.
Soon.